Charlie II

But why would any elephant pick one colour when they could have them all ?

Hey Laurence, Old people I like your portrayal of Pino. There's something quite difficult about writing a piece in the perspective of an older person, but I think you managed ...

Charlie's first thought was that he had been teleported. He holstered the PSG and got to his feet, surveying the unconscious zombies lying in a pile around him. They weren't ...

Charlie was running out of breath and the zombies were catching up with him. In one hand he held the remains of Lumi's leash, more for a keepsake than any ...

I don't know how to write this review so I'm just going to let it all splurge out. I've got to be honest: I think you've written two poems. The ...

Charlie felt that feeling of rearrangement as the forum shift redrafted him to Dramatic Poetry. He held tight to Lumi's leash and seconds later he felt them re-materialise. Fortunately Lumi ...

Thank you, Rosey. Any more? :)

"Aren't we forgetting something, guys?" "Oh yeah," said Charlie. "We're meant to be running!" He looked back to the others -- most of them were still in The Vault. Incognito ...

*like-ity-like*

Hello again, Tinny -- I do hope you're still writing this: Ruby You're right -- it's not needed at the beginning. I think you know that though because of the ...

Everybody looked at Kitty15 except Kyllorac who was having some sort of existential crisis. "Get those stickies rolled up," she said. "We're going to The Vault." That started some mutterings. ...

The mist ended as soon as the YWSers entered Resources. Charlie never failed to be impressed whenever he visited that forum. Stone pillars reached up majestically from the marble floor ...

"Well," said Charlie, "we're still rather under-equipped." "Speak for yourself," Kyll replied spinning the .38 round in his/her hand. Charlie ignored Them. "Why doesn't Rosey lead us back to resources

To be fair to the narrator, it was rather inconvenient. "I hate corn," I mutter unhelpfully. "It's like 'long grass' -- gets right up my nose." "At least it's not ...

Ok I've decided to review both pieces here -- I hope that's alright! Ideas Aha -- here's an author who has a world in her head. :wink: I like how ...